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Post  Admin on Mon May 31, 2010 7:21 am

To create pain I must remember.
To avenge those I hurt I must remember.
To feel humbled I must remember.
To calm down I must remember.
To want to cry I must remember.
To feel happy I can't remember.
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Re: Remember

Post  Admin on Mon May 31, 2010 7:39 am

I don't particularily like this one :/ It has this weird feeling about it and I dont really feel any sort of poeticy smush that you usually get with poems, I'll have to think about this...
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Re: Remember

Post  Wonderer on Mon May 31, 2010 2:58 pm

I love how it's all consistent and then at the end the last line is diffrent Smile

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Post  Crystal:) on Tue Jun 01, 2010 11:01 am

Y don't u like it?
I get poeticy smush with it xD


.. I advise u to not remember Smile wouldn't want u to not be happy

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Post  Admin on Wed Jun 02, 2010 1:43 pm

Oh you're so cute! well, I'm about to describe something and you might get lost. If you do, just forget this post cyclops

Basically, when I read or write poems I always get this image in my head of a sort of mass-like thing and basically, if the shape is roundish then I like it but some of these poems make me think of an angularish shape. This I don't like. E.g. 'your new home' in my mind looks a bit like a splodge. almost flower-shaped. where as this one is like 3 rectangles piled on top of each other. its all pointy.
make any sense?
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Post  Crystal:) on Wed Jun 02, 2010 2:49 pm

I think so Smile

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