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Post  Admin on Mon May 31, 2010 7:24 am

The hedge runs high and the child does laugh,
It's all good fun, as long as she can escape.
The hedge grows taller and the candle,
signifies the end and is glowing.
The sky grows darker but she still has her candle.
Out of the shadows a figure appears,
it knows the way. Comforting at least.
The sky is dark and the wind does blow,
Its starts to rain and the hedges grow,
taller, taller.
The candle goes out.
The person ahead vanishes.
Don't leave me here alone.
Don't leave me on my own.
The child falls to the ground.
Darkness surrounds her,
Darkness becomes her.
Fear turns to sickness.
Fear of being alone.
What if day never returns?

Giggled laughter becomes scorn,
She did not ask to be born.
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Post  Admin on Mon May 31, 2010 7:33 am

I wrote this at nearly 3am so I apologise if it's a bit crap. I have a habit of using metaphors to convey my feelings etc. And... yeah, this is what came out of it.
Any thoughts, anyone?
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Post  Wonderer on Mon May 31, 2010 3:01 pm

I like this one more - it's longer Smile You should write long ones Smile

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Post  Crystal:) on Tue Jun 01, 2010 11:15 am

It is not crap!! It's great
the last to lines are really sad :'( huuuuuuuuuuuuuuuugs

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Post  Admin on Wed Jun 02, 2010 1:52 pm

Embarassed thanks *huugs*

I have written a few long ones, I like the lengths to vary. Theyre usually longer if I'm telling a story and shorter if it's a message.
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